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Stephanie M. Vargo's avatar

Sometimes I write the best things when I don't know what to write. This is so nostalgic and beautiful.

Mathew W Smith's avatar

You've hit the nail on the head again! I think the roughness adds to it. I liked it.

williamphaynes/elliott's avatar

thank you very much for commenting

Alicia's avatar

You said so much.

Lenny Cavallaro's avatar

Thanks for sharing this gem. Whether or not I know what to write, I invariably hear the ticking of the clock!

williamphaynes/elliott's avatar

Thank you very much/ your comments make it all worthwhile

Sunshine's avatar

Reading this, I could almost taste the salt in the air and feel the sun of years gone by. There’s something deeply moving about the way you hold the memory of the ocean alongside the quiet of the present.

Bella Simonetta's avatar

Thank you, William. The ocean stayed with me long after I finished reading. So did that final silence.🥺

williamphaynes/elliott's avatar

Thank you vvery much/ I've always loved the water (and i can't even swim)

Bella Simonetta's avatar

I know exactly what you mean. I don’t swim either, yet I feel strangely attached to the sea. Whenever I’m away from Brighton for even a short while, I find myself missing it. There’s something comforting about the water, as though it quietly reminds me where I belong.🌊

williamphaynes/elliott's avatar

yes, the water seems to be always beconing

Petra's avatar

Ouch, this aches. Excellent writing often happens when we don't know what to write, then do it anyway. <3

Robert Blake's avatar

This is excellent writing!

Ross Ion Coyle (M)'s avatar

Very evocative. Beautiful

Himanshu's avatar

Hauntingly beautiful!

williamphaynes/elliott's avatar

a trip down memory lane/ thanks for commenting